10-28-2024, 08:30 AM
Your poem certainly was a trip. I was caught confused which route you were going with at first, if it was a poem about the beauty of the cosmos and the stars in their constellations or if it was about a previous partner. Turns out it was both! I gotta say, the ending was very abrupt and it did get a chuckle out of me, and thus really clarified the subject matter of the poem. I loved the metaphor you used to describe framed photos “little portions of littler people” and found it really creative. I would say maybe you could make it clearer for the reader as it is confusing to read and some lines seem disconnected from others. Great work though!