11-21-2024, 12:23 AM
Kosmos
When the fiery maple
has become extinguished
and the Milky Way draped
When you run up on complications like become or has been, you can always see if the logic and meaning you're putting across works without words:
When, the fiery maple
extinguished,
the Milky Way draped
You seem to have six syllables in each line, depending on how we pronounce things.
Was the poem an exercise in that sort of thing?
across the spruce, and pines,
theatres are lit up,
and the all dramas can be
You get the picture. Do what you like.
You can, most likely, balance the meter in a new way, or let it play free.
Seems to me that content dictates form.
And that is its own kind of balance.
eclipsed by a finger.
How many murders will
I witness tonight?
Unless you're playing on the word evening.
I couldn't help myself but say the sonically and rational inevitable.
When the fiery maple
has become extinguished
and the Milky Way draped
When you run up on complications like become or has been, you can always see if the logic and meaning you're putting across works without words:
When, the fiery maple
extinguished,
the Milky Way draped
You seem to have six syllables in each line, depending on how we pronounce things.
Was the poem an exercise in that sort of thing?
across the spruce, and pines,
theatres are lit up,
and the all dramas can be
You get the picture. Do what you like.
You can, most likely, balance the meter in a new way, or let it play free.
Seems to me that content dictates form.
And that is its own kind of balance.
eclipsed by a finger.
How many murders will
I witness tonight?
Unless you're playing on the word evening.
I couldn't help myself but say the sonically and rational inevitable.