Nothing but net

[Magpie]

Then the heaving grunt of exertion,
the singular slap of rubber on tar,
the silence,
the silence,
the thud of leather against a ring of iron.
The silence.
The repetition.

It occurs to me that this section could be put to better use in the sense that the dunk is about 'rising' which is in alignment with the context of the poem and the escapism. It is in this moment that the boy may feel most free. Is there a way of incorporating this within this section. Just a thought.

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FFS, Magpie . . . after your British, google-aided analysis, I feel I have to step in and give the poem the correct read. 


reaching into his pocket for a cigarette. Touchdown.  - ffs Valerie wrong sport