11-28-2024, 08:33 AM
Maybe it’s me, but I had trouble grasping the essense of your poem. In the opening your narrator is tired, he has stinging eyes (from what).
In the middle he has given up, “there is no use fighting (fighting what) anymore.
At the end he is being dragged unconscious across the forest floor. I guess I don’t understand how your narrator would know he’s being dragged across the forest floor if he’s unconscious.
Maybe there’s more to this poem than meets the eye, but I thought it could use some expansion and clarification.
In the middle he has given up, “there is no use fighting (fighting what) anymore.
At the end he is being dragged unconscious across the forest floor. I guess I don’t understand how your narrator would know he’s being dragged across the forest floor if he’s unconscious.
Maybe there’s more to this poem than meets the eye, but I thought it could use some expansion and clarification.