02-09-2025, 10:04 AM
I think this poem is really interesting, and I like the unique form, but it feels like it could be more purposful because right now its confusing and not in a good way.
the loooooooook and looooooooong throws me off as well as the fact that this line isn't the same as the others. Is that supposed to mean or imply something? Some of the unecessary hyphens leave some questions as well. I don't mind vague/odd poetry, but sometimes it can completely disconnect the reader if there is nothing for us to hold on to.
I will say, I really loved #2 though. great imagery and idea.
the loooooooook and looooooooong throws me off as well as the fact that this line isn't the same as the others. Is that supposed to mean or imply something? Some of the unecessary hyphens leave some questions as well. I don't mind vague/odd poetry, but sometimes it can completely disconnect the reader if there is nothing for us to hold on to.
I will say, I really loved #2 though. great imagery and idea.