Currently Untitiled (CW: Domestic Abuse)

[flotsson]

Posting here first to get my feet wet, but if it needs more than basic feedback lmk. 


Broken blessings read like curses.
Bleeding scars are open wounds.
Rain falls when the sun is shining,
Know The Devil's wife is doomed.

Wanting grasses beg for water.
Dried roots cannot take in pools.
Horses won't drink where you lead them.
Useless waters are false boons.

Winter coat on in the summer,
Where the Sun has met the Moon.
Force can't make a wife a lover.
Fingers rotted her cocoon.

I liked this a lot! I only have a few minor critiques. First, I'm not sure if capitalizing each line does much for the poem. For me, it's distracting. Second I find the final line of stanza 2 to trip the rhythm a bit, but maybe that's my accent. These are relatively minor issues; overall I find the poem to be very compelling.