Oahu
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(02-14-2025, 04:18 PM)Bunx Wrote:  Oahu

Sand covers feet
an ant crawls near.
People in the ocean
smaller with distance.

Planes fly there,
tourists come and go.
Ponder perspective 
self in reflection.

Just like the beach,
city, mud, or mountains
ants crawl nearby.
Growing small with distance.

Do ants think about resilience?
I like the juxtaposition of people in the distance, and ants. Both go everywhere.

I don't think the last line is needed. The poem does well as an observational piece. Questions are implied.

Nice one.
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Oahu - by Bunx - 02-14-2025, 04:18 PM
RE: Oahu - by midnightcowboy - 02-21-2025, 02:30 PM
RE: Oahu - by Trillium - 03-16-2025, 03:11 AM
RE: Oahu - by busker - 03-16-2025, 05:38 AM



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