03-28-2025, 01:12 AM
First, I would like to say that this is a very strong poem in both its composition and ideas. You have done an outstanding job in making mental images feel physical. The only thing I would change would be the title, as I feel that it doesn't truly connect to the poem until the very end, but that could also be just me. I unfortunately cannot think of any new titles off the top of my head at the moment, but I'm sure you can figure one out based on how experienced and skilled you appear to be with poetry.
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