Recurrence (updated)

[Mark A Becker]

Thanks for the help! I was trying to figure out how people did this 

Alright, metal, you did it.

ps You're most welcome

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Recurrence 

A bitter thing
happens so often
emotions barely
whisper
when they used to
shout


I fear change
being alone
so I put on
a smile
realizing I’m about to
lie when I say


“I forgive you”.

Forgiveness

Recurrence
A bitter thing
Forces me back in my shell
And yet
It happens so often
The emotions barely whisper
When they used to shout


I fear change, fear being alone
So I put on a smile
And tell you all is well
Then the emotions surge bold and true
Realizing I’m about to tell a lie when I say


“I forgive you”.

Good job- this version says more wth fewer words, and allows the reader room to ponder.

For me this poem describes an abusive quandry that the N seems to feel stuck in. The lack of specific details allows this reader to imagine all sorts of scenarios. Your intentional vagueness is a good thing. The 'fill-in-the-blank' sparseness makes this reader FEEL the near desperation of the writer- searching for an elusive solution.
... Mark