04-07-2025, 08:17 AM
Hi Lynn-
Your senryu would work better with a sharper twist at the last line.
That's the most difficult thing with this form- how to juxtapose those last 5 syllables.
Also- check out the NaPm25 thread in 'MILO's Forum. That's where a lot of us are concentrating on the poem/a/day challenge.
... Mark
Your senryu would work better with a sharper twist at the last line.
That's the most difficult thing with this form- how to juxtapose those last 5 syllables.
Also- check out the NaPm25 thread in 'MILO's Forum. That's where a lot of us are concentrating on the poem/a/day challenge.
... Mark