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[poetry_zealot]

Hello zealot-

It takes some courage
to walk the yellow brick road,
but more to walk back  There is no juxaposition here, only a continuation of the previous sentence. That is not how senryu/haiku work.

The syllable count is not what the form is really about. A twist, a cut, or turn is needed in the final five.  That's what makes this form so difficult, yet so interesting.

That said, it is good that you do not have a title, as this form does not usually use titles. You could use the first line for that purpose, though.

Respectfully,
Mark

Thank you for your feedback and highlighting something I wasn't aware of. I will remember that before creating a new one.