Death Interludes Lullabies

[The_system_screams]

To read between the lines what the spaces intentions are is where this poem resides for me. For me this reads like the first-time parent watching his little one sleep and that magical moment. You want silence yet not too much, see them breathe is just exactly that. I think the worries are portrait through those pauses and uncertainty. From this section:

            this pause
                                      this
                                                    stop—                                  //Here we have the worries manifesting
                                                                are all that remains    //And just watching
between the seconds
time doesn’t                                                      pass                //almost holding your breath yourself.
                                        you do                                              //so simple, elegant and poignant
so sleep, now—
                        and bring your breaths
                                                                        to night
i’ll hold the silence                                                                    //the watcher
                                                  ‘til your breath of life              //- and the child oblivious about the concerned parent

I like it. I unfortunately can't say much more. I've said it before and say it again - you have a knack of seeing and understanding space within poems and it shows here. The spaces read to me. You use it for space, for pause, for framing, for symmetry... it's all good.