Color Enforcement

[dukealien]

The poem is a long rant.
S1 is a run on sentence. The argument is also bogus to anyone who’s been to South Africa. The description “hellish state” is from Fox News, not experience.

S2…Sn are all prose with line breaks.

The central thesis is also untenable - are there any black refugees that the US is taking in BECAUSE they are black? The American right has always argued against Syrian refugees, many of whom are whiter than the Boers after 400 years of life in Africa and getting mixed ancestry in that period.


There is good racist poetry. Kipling did it well. This one doesn’t.

So, in Basic, you object to the run-on sentences.  That's fair.  Any other suggestions for improvement?