Children are blind to poetry

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I would echo what the other commenter said, removing the word children would transform this poem into a sort of puzzle that needs to be solved by its reader. I conflate puzzles with childhood so while it might just be me, I think the puzzle-like effect would also translate well to audiences who don't have that personal connection to puzzles. Great poem, with an amazing idea. It doesn't come off as pretentious, it's more of a concerned despair. Nice execution