06-29-2025, 09:31 AM
See if it sounds better to change that line "the innocent love" to "love of the innocent"
Try to delete the "whatever that is" line.It helps with the flow of how it's read. And this is my first critique. Apologies if it came out wrong.
Try to delete the "whatever that is" line.It helps with the flow of how it's read. And this is my first critique. Apologies if it came out wrong.