Bitterness - edit

[Richard]

Hey Duke, I remember the chalky mint stuff too. I like the change to "unpleasant remedies" in S2. I wonder if in the last line of S2, you could get even more specific by saying something like: "those chalky mint spoonfuls made them well" or "those spoonfuls of chalky mint made them well"? Just a thought. You could always play around with it to get the right rhythm. Wonderful poem.