A Good Idea

[tun]

I like how the poem personifies the “bad idea” almost as a trickster-double of the speaker — rolling behind the eyes, disguising itself, even “wearing your skin.” That imagery gives the feeling of an invasive thought that slowly becomes indistinguishable from the self. The ending couplet works well because it pivots from eerie description to a plain, vulnerable question.

If anything, I wonder if you could heighten the contrast between the playful tone (“frolicked,” “tickled my ear”) and the darker undertone of being overtaken — leaning into that tension could make the piece feel even more unsettling.