09-20-2025, 02:37 AM
I appericate the cadance of the repeating words, like people and basic human drives. By not knowing who the narrarator is, the scope of who could be tell the story, adding a sea of depth. One critique I have, is that the poem feels drawn out in place it doesn't need to be, for example using an entire line to highlight the words "and" or "therein".

