Fish,Bowl,Back,To,See

[Deor Ana Log]

Thank you for the analysis Jack. The commas in the title are not supposed to be conventional, they are intended to break the norm and enhance the tone. Other than that, for my revision I will lean into grounded imagery like you and Tun said. The "ficton" is this poem is that the narrator suddenly notice their head inside a fishbowl full of water. So they drown, but never get notice because of the clear glass.

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Okay I have revised this poem, hopefully making the metaphor more poignant and poised.