09-25-2025, 08:52 AM
I think this paints a character really well. I really like your metaphors.
To make it better, I would add some contrast. An different point of view perhaps? or anything to make your piece less static, to show the reader a direction to go from here
To make it better, I would add some contrast. An different point of view perhaps? or anything to make your piece less static, to show the reader a direction to go from here