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09-25-2025, 11:05 AM

(09-25-2025, 02:26 AM)RiverNotch Wrote: thanks for the feedback. it should be fully IP now.

Definitely improved. "Succor" is a neat way to still suggest ingestion, as I suppose the Italian idiom does.

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Wind v2 - by RiverNotch - 09-22-2025, 04:02 PM

RE: Wind - by dukealien - 09-24-2025, 05:32 AM

RE: Wind v2 - by RiverNotch - 09-25-2025, 02:26 AM

RE: Wind v2 - by dukealien - 09-25-2025, 11:05 AM

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