Insecurity
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I really like the theme of this poem. My advice would be to play with structure I feel like some readers will have a hard time with finding the flow within this structure. Also I'd suggest messing with your delivery. It's could be a bit more concise with less repetition. It might make your points more powerful.

Anywho thanks for the read
Only one thing is impossible for God: To find any sense in any copyright law on the planet.
--mark twain
Bunx
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Insecurity - by yourlocalaliyen - 10-07-2025, 09:24 PM
RE: Insecurity - by Bunx - 10-08-2025, 01:27 AM
RE: Insecurity - by yourlocalaliyen - 10-08-2025, 01:32 AM
RE: Insecurity - by Brokenangel1960 - 10-19-2025, 07:46 AM
RE: Insecurity - by Bitnee - 10-22-2025, 06:20 AM



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