A Way With Caraway

[wasellajam]

You do not have even a single bare spot here. It’s colorful and maximalist and I adore it and it needs some work. I’m going to think about it for a bit.

First pass:

Narration is strong. Good, because it cuts through the maximalism. A path through the piles.
Meemaw - Alice - daughter - narrator. A lot of characters for 5 stanzas. 4 people? Or 3? It’s hovering on becoming crowded, not cheerfully so.

Fixating on the phrase “originally from Norway”. Originally. That is bugging me. Why? I don’t know. It should work, because the word conveys a provenance and this poem is about provenance. But it is bugging me.

There are maybe 3 poems here. Or 4, like characters waving.

Thank you so much for posting!!! I was hoping the cast was more identifiable but if the poem is interesting enough for you to come back I’ll be patient. This is me trying to edit on my own lol. I shuffled and cut and may have left total confusion. I won’t say anymore hoping you’ll come back and let me know how it reads.