05-11-2026, 04:48 AM
edit 3;
My mind’s escaping, entering
a space I only notice when
it’s gone
These last three days
three words returned too late
they’d each been inaccessible
when concepts needed names
snare: caught out, I couldn’t name
simple rabbit-catching
anchored loop of wire
when a child asked how
to trap a leprechaun
Kurds: buried name
one brave people snared
in four countries
and their aspiration
to restore a nation
Etruscans: secret name
tribes of smiling mystery
exhumed from Tuscan provenance
rising in dream-murmurs
as lost words do
How much of my mind’s
diverse vocabulary
has evanesced for good
hidden or erased
soft-sunk for what of life is left
in a room so finely
padded with absence
that its walls
cannot be seen or felt?
Revisiting this one with benefit of additional criticism (particularly @alonso ramoran's), it's beginning to feel a bit brittle so changes are minor. Since it was generally disliked, the easiest (best?) way to clear up the alphabet search business was to simply remove it; it added nothing without at least a line of explanation and would be worse with it. Also, since "refined" was understandably disliked, I replaced it with a word readers who know me will recognize as slightly wicked, but others will like the vees. I hope.
My mind’s escaping, entering
a space I only notice when
it’s gone
These last three days
three words returned too late
they’d each been inaccessible
when concepts needed names
snare: caught out, I couldn’t name
simple rabbit-catching
anchored loop of wire
when a child asked how
to trap a leprechaun
Kurds: buried name
one brave people snared
in four countries
and their aspiration
to restore a nation
Etruscans: secret name
tribes of smiling mystery
exhumed from Tuscan provenance
rising in dream-murmurs
as lost words do
How much of my mind’s
diverse vocabulary
has evanesced for good
hidden or erased
soft-sunk for what of life is left
in a room so finely
padded with absence
that its walls
cannot be seen or felt?
Revisiting this one with benefit of additional criticism (particularly @alonso ramoran's), it's beginning to feel a bit brittle so changes are minor. Since it was generally disliked, the easiest (best?) way to clear up the alphabet search business was to simply remove it; it added nothing without at least a line of explanation and would be worse with it. Also, since "refined" was understandably disliked, I replaced it with a word readers who know me will recognize as slightly wicked, but others will like the vees. I hope.
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