Yesterday, 08:07 PM
Hello - I am new to the group and would welcome feedback. This is a poem that I have already drafted a number of times from the original. If its helpful I can post the original. Thank you for taking time to read.
Flatness and fatigue, a vacancy where you sat.
To be blunt, I don’t want this.
Leftovers hidden under overcooked greens
harder to swallow when cold.
Here I am plucking on invisible strings
because we are ever connected.
Strains on the tiny thread.
I wish you were here, not just in my head.
Kaleidoscope shows that open all hours
a front row seat that’s ticketless.
I saved you a place; just encase you came.
OK. Black tape rolling.
Are you ignoring me?
Do you remember our chat?
I was that woman, the floppy straw hat.
Miles upon miles, stretched
grey sand, you were never a fan.
It’s so bloody cold. Incandescent, my heart.
Pools of salt water, old memories cleaned.
She was sooo beautiful and so were you.
Grit and the silt and the sound of the sea
I am just asking now, let’s let things be.
Flatness and fatigue, a vacancy where you sat.
To be blunt, I don’t want this.
Leftovers hidden under overcooked greens
harder to swallow when cold.
Here I am plucking on invisible strings
because we are ever connected.
Strains on the tiny thread.
I wish you were here, not just in my head.
Kaleidoscope shows that open all hours
a front row seat that’s ticketless.
I saved you a place; just encase you came.
OK. Black tape rolling.
Are you ignoring me?
Do you remember our chat?
I was that woman, the floppy straw hat.
Miles upon miles, stretched
grey sand, you were never a fan.
It’s so bloody cold. Incandescent, my heart.
Pools of salt water, old memories cleaned.
She was sooo beautiful and so were you.
Grit and the silt and the sound of the sea
I am just asking now, let’s let things be.