Guggenheim and Pollock edit 3

Guggenheim and Pollock edit 3

JohnS

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05-17-2026, 01:49 AM

Feedback,

This is coming along nicely, Ella.
My only concern is the first two lines of S4, they disorient me, taking me out of Venice, back to NY briefly and then back to Venice. Could they be dropped without losing anything important?

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Guggenheim and Pollock edit 3 - by wasellajam - 05-09-2026, 08:56 PM

RE: Guggenheim and Pollock - by RiverNotch - 05-11-2026, 05:06 PM

RE: Guggenheim and Pollock - by JohnS - 05-11-2026, 05:32 PM

RE: Guggenheim and Pollock - by wasellajam - 05-11-2026, 06:33 PM

RE: Guggenheim and Pollock edit - by wasellajam - 05-15-2026, 11:24 PM

RE: Guggenheim and Pollock edit - by JohnS - 05-17-2026, 01:49 AM

RE: Guggenheim and Pollock edit - by wasellajam - 05-17-2026, 02:49 AM

RE: Guggenheim and Pollock edit - by busker - 05-17-2026, 04:19 AM

RE: Guggenheim and Pollock edit - by wasellajam - 05-17-2026, 05:34 AM

RE: Guggenheim and Pollock edit 3 - by wasellajam - 05-17-2026, 09:26 PM

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