05-17-2026, 02:49 AM
(05-17-2026, 01:49 AM)JohnS Wrote: Feedback,Great point, I'm sure I can edit that somehow. Thanks for reading the edit and taking the time to comment, much appreciated.
This is coming along nicely, Ella.
My only concern is the first two lines of S4, they disorient me, taking me out of Venice, back to NY briefly and then back to Venice. Could they be dropped without losing anything important?

