Don't press send.

[JohnS]

A nice, straightforward poem.  A few little suggestions.

These days boys stay at home,
in their room, computer going,  ?too weird to say "computer-ing". flows better
talking to some AI friend,
taking pictures
and pressing send.   maybe...taking pictures, pressing send. 


They should be at the swimming hole,
or by the river with a fishing pole.
Hanging out, maybe smoking weed,
playing records
and building dreams.


Hey kids,
that pretty gal on your computer screen,    this stanza could use a better rhyme somewhere
isn’t what you think she is,
it’s some guy lurking behind the scenes,
don’t send those pictures or your life is his.


Another boy took his life today,
he didn’t have enough cash to pay
to get his pictures back again.


Any critique gratefully received.

good message.  unfortunately not likely to be read by the intended audience

Thank you, Bruce, good points.