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[Wjames]

Isn’t that the way it is
after 25 years
lying next to each other
 
one stirring, the other
half-awake murmuring
in her half-awake voice I like the repetition here.
 
good night sweetie
and you turn
your face in her hair
 
only to get lost again in her scent
shampoo and perfume I think this line is sort of generic - how does her shampoo and perfume smell? Could just cut this line imo or make it more specific.
Antonio’s Flowers you think
 
in that moment for a moment
you are nothing but blue eyes
moving across the lobby holding
 
you in her gaze just long enough
to undo you, and the belly laugh
when she learned your mother This is a fantastic line break.
 
and her favorite doll growing up
had the same name. I love you
you say to the back of her head
 
to the sound of even breathing
your legs two peninsulas separated do you need 'your'?
by a sea of pets as you drift into sleep
 
Isn’t that the way it is? Another lovely repitition.

Hey bryn, I really enjoyed this one. 

A beautiful image of profound routine, nicely conversational.