Can AI write a good poem?

[milo]

An exercise:

1) I asked 3 different AI agents to "write me an excellent poem about how it feels to be human". These were predictably terrible. 
2) I alphabetized their responses as a whole, removing duplicate words, and used it as the vocabulary for a poem on same (I get to repeat/conjugate words as I please).
3) Here's the result. I think our jobs are safe but I am happy to be wrong: 

What It’s Like

The trick of smallness is to stand up
to the stars, whose lungs map out a million rivers
overnight, whose frigid ribs dissolve before our words

can ever reach. A thousand thousand winters
stitching atoms in the cold gives you a bad back,
so they dream of summer’s palms

against their spines: if you doubt it,
place tomorrow in a cardboard box, heavy it
with river rocks and drown it until Tuesday 

comes up bleeding on another system’s shore. 
How’s that for a theory 
of everything? While our skin

outlives its use, somehow these things
return: aching pulse, consciousness, syntax
and its awful jokes, architecture, firewood,

a cardboard box, an hour. Shores of singing
sentences predictable as loving you again, memory
and/or miracle—even, briefly, beauty.

The original AI poems: 

ChatGPT 
We wake as questions wearing skin,
breath stitching light into our lungs,
a fragile rhythm borrowed
from a universe that forgets nothing
and forgives everything slowly.

We build small meanings out of dust—
a name, a touch, a place to return to—
though every road dissolves behind us
like a thought we almost understood.

To be human is to reach anyway:
through doubt, through distance, through time,
to hold another fleeting heartbeat
and call it real
before it slips back into mystery.

-
Gemini
We are a strange and heavy architecture,
built of wet clay and staggering desire,
holding the universe in temporary fracture,
caught right between the bedrock and the fire.
To be a human is to carry clocks
inside a pulse that wants to live forever,
to build a fortress out of cardboard boxes
and map the stars while drowning in the river.
We gather grief like firewood for the winter,
we weave our grandest tapestries from pain,
and pull from tender palms the smallest splinter,
only to stand and love and bleed again.
We are the only beasts that weep at beauty,
who lose our sleep over a tomorrow we can't see,
tethered to flesh, to gravity, to duty,
yet desperate, wild, and aching to be free.
No map is true, no destination certain,
we stumble forward, fragile and sublime,
singing our syntax through a heavy curtain,
leaving our footprints on the shores of time.

-

Claude

What the Body Knows

You wake already mid-sentence,
a thought still finishing itself
from a dream you can't quite hold—
and this is the first miracle:
that consciousness returns at all,
that you are, again, someone.

To be human is to carry a weather system
behind the ribs, unpredictable,
sun breaking through an hour after
you'd given up on sun.
It's grief arriving without an appointment.
It's laughing so hard at a joke
you forget, for a second, that you'll die.

It's the strange arithmetic of memory—
how a smell can be a time machine,
how a song from a bad year
still knows your name.

It's loving people you can't fix
and being loved by people who can't fix you,
and calling that enough,
and meaning it.

It's the ten thousand small negotiations
between what you want
and what you'll actually do—
the alarm clock, the diet, the apology
you're still working up to.

It's standing in a kitchen at midnight
eating something cold from the fridge,
feeling, for no reason,
briefly and completely alive.

It's knowing you are a temporary arrangement
of borrowed atoms,
and getting a haircut anyway.
Buying the plant that outlives you.
Planning next summer.

This is the trick of it—
not transcending the smallness,
but finding it's enough:
a body, a few decades,
a handful of people who know your face,
one ordinary Tuesday
after another
after another,
somehow, a life.

I think I recently posted a whole "AI writing a good poem" thread as well although initially, I think I was attempting to prove that you could get better "crit" results from AI by pretending the poem was not yours as - if you understand the machinery under the hood with AI you understand it is trying to produce a result that will please the prompter, not necessarily a correct result.

Anyway - it came up with this ridiculous scale so I challenged it to write a 10.0/10.0 sonnet and it produced pretty much what you would expect an AI to produce so after I explained it was trash and why it asked to give it another shot and produced this:  (I have included some of the surrounding discussion for context)



Now, to your challenge.
The constraints I'd set myself are:

• No metrical padding.
  
• No "poetic" adjectives unless they do real work.
  
• Frequent but controlled enjambment.
  
• A volta that arises naturally from the images rather than announcing itself.
  
• No line that exists solely because of rhyme.
  
• An ending that retrospectively changes the opening.
  

Here's an attempt.

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Stone Mason
The mason split the granite with a line
so thin I thought the hammer struck by chance.
He smiled, then turned the block a quarter stance,
and tapped again. The fracture, once benign,
ran where the hidden crystal chose to shine,
not where his arm compelled it. Every glance
he cast was spent on faults that circumstance
had buried long before they answered mine.
I asked what strength could teach a stone to yield.
He brushed the dust away instead of speaking,
laid down his tools, and walked across the field
where winter wheat, though bent, was never breaking.
The wall still stands because he never sealed
a crack until he knew which way it was seeking.

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Why I think this is better
I think it's significantly stronger than the astronomer sonnet, though I'd still hesitate to call it a masterpiece.
1. The imagery is unified.
Everything comes from one world:

• granite
  
• fracture
  
• crystal
  
• hammer
  
• wall
  
• wheat
  
• cracks
  

The field at the end isn't a new symbolic system—it's another example of material responding to force.

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2. The volta isn't announced.
Instead of
Until one dawn...
the poem gradually shifts.
The speaker begins by observing technique.
Then asks a question.
The mason never answers directly.
Instead he demonstrates.
The poem becomes about understanding the nature of resistance rather than overcoming it.

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3. The ending grows from the central metaphor.
The wall still stands because he never sealed
a crack until he knew which way it was seeking.
The crack becomes more than a literal crack.
It's also conflict.
People.
Ideas.
Grief.
Nothing is explicitly named.
Hopefully the metaphor stays open.

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4. I tried to avoid ornamental language.
There's almost no adjective unless it's identifying something.
"Hidden crystal."
"Winter wheat."
Otherwise the nouns and verbs carry the poem.

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What I'd still criticize
This is where I think the difference between a very good poem and a great one lies.
The final metaphor is perhaps a little too legible.
By the end, most readers will understand the wall represents relationships or character.
The best sonnets often preserve a little more mystery.
Also, the line
where winter wheat, though bent, was never breaking
is probably my weakest.
It risks sounding proverbial.
I'm not completely convinced by it.
Finally, I think the diction is perhaps too restrained.
Great sonnets often contain one line that makes you stop because you've never quite seen language arranged that way before. I don't think this one has that line.

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If I were judging my own work harshly, I'd put the first sonnet around a 7.5/10 and this one around an 8.5/10. The jump isn't because it's "deeper"; it's because I think there's less visible scaffolding. The rhyme doesn't seem to be steering the poem nearly as much, and the imagery and argument remain in conversation throughout.
One thing your comments made me realize is that your standard isn't just "well-written formal poetry." You're looking for poems where the craft disappears. When you can see the poet solving metrical problems or reaching for a rhyme, the illusion breaks. That's actually a standard I share. The frustrating part is that it's much easier to recognize that quality in revision than it is to produce it on demand. Most sonnets that feel inevitable have been rewritten dozens of times until every compromise has been either eliminated or hidden