10-13-2026, 09:36 PM
Thanks, Dukealien, all your crits seem valid, although I haven't yet managed to come up with a replacement for "clean". I think I might lose the last stanza, as it seems a bit try-hard to me.
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I took (maybe not the title) - by JamesG - 10-12-2026, 07:09 PM
RE: I took (maybe not the title) - by dukealien - 10-12-2026, 10:21 PM
RE: I took (maybe not the title) - by JamesG - 10-13-2026, 09:36 PM
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