4 hours ago
I appreciate the time! Not sure my critique is valid in a duel, but the envoi is my favorite part of the sestina, the hard part, here id use your first stanza as the envoi at the end because it is compact, starting the poem with 'good ole suicidal Charlie Brown', using 'three' lines or 39 lines, and using the 'four' somewhere else in the envoi. I was very pleased to read something that worked, out of nonsense you were given. Having consistent line lengths does make the form more apparent, otherwise we're just inserting words wherever rather than having designated places. I love the last line, I think the whole thing has potential as a sestina or cut down to a free verse depending on edits. Seeing as it's a throwaway challenge I didnt expect this to be taken remotely seriously. I'd be happy to play again or work on other challenges, when I'm not working and sleeping of course.
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