On Bias

[lucienne24]

On Bias || like dukealien, i'm not convinced this title works. it does encourage you to enter the poem looking for evidence of the speaker/other characters' skewed perceptions of things, but i don't think the reader really needs that immediate prompting to differentiate the speaker's or their ex's outlook

Whenever I see something good, I save it || ooh also this poem flirts with blank verse/rhyming metrical verse in a way that's almost satisfying? but there are some places especially where i actually wish you committed to that structure more.
for my ex. She likes the same things I do,
which is how we used to make it work, but
at a higher volume, which is how I knew || agree again with duke that "higher volume" has the appropriate level of ambiguity/double meaning. kinda wish we got one more statement about her with a similar level of "directness" towards the end of the poem, after the blind boy x dog video.
we wouldn't. I send her native people, or
whatever you should call them now,
discovering The Skateboard. I send her
braids of moths and children who know not || splitting the line here feels awkward, like for a second you feel like you're getting this out-of-place formality in language (i.e. "i know not how to thank you"). btw i think you provide just about the right number of example videos, but i still wish you dwelt on this image a little longer, since it might also reveal something about what the speaker vs. the ex values in a relationship-- does the speaker have a higher appreciation for distance, for restraint, for not touching? does the speaker just feel like children knowing not to touch something reflects a level of idealism that they just don't buy?  
to touch them. I send her latke recipes and
mystic surfer music. I send her lovely
cockroaches, sometimes a naughty dog. || "lovely cockroaches, sometimes a naughty dog" one of those satisfying phrases that, again, makes me wish we got something that rhymed a few lines down.. but then again this marks a bit of a narrative inflection point 
These are by far her favorite, with their
blatant clickbait titles: Husky Steals Ice Cream
from Sister, Tiny Pug Gets Mad. In this one,
Mom and Dad present the blind boy
with a puppy and he goes to hold it
in his arms and ends up clutching air.
Mom clearly wants to help, but thinks
it's maybe not her place; Dad just kind of stares 
at something moving on the lawn. Eventually || mixed feelings about the parents here, and i agree that the build-up is long in a way that doesn't quite achieve tension. i wonder if you can experiment with the parents taking different actions-- though i think i like the dad's avoidance?-- until you get an overall mood that you feel contributes the most to the speaker-ex narrative... are we meant to believe that the parents are showing subtle emotional signs the ex would overlook (and that the speaker clearly does not) because of the video's "redemptive" ending?
he gets it and it's all extremely sweet: the beagle 
licks his face. He says his name is Cheez-It. 
There's nothing sad about it, nothing desperate 
or relentless. I think it's a nice video. Objectively, || "nothing desperate or relentless" i like this. the speaker in their brand of ambivalence/"realism" thinks their ex might recoil from that sort of "complexity," so their sending videos is a weird gesture meant partially to show them love and meant partially to remind themself of why this partner was not right for them. not entirelyyyy sold on the very last line but i think i'm ok with it
it's nice.

interesting piece! threw a bunch of suggestions out there with the idea of promoting more "hints" or thematic cohesion, but i really do like the overall voice and subtlety as is, and i don't think the length should really be altered much. just wanted some of the video narratives to be more pointed, punchier, maybe. thanks so much for sharing!!