Haiku (when I'm sad and heavy)

[busker]

Haiku

When I'm sad and heavy
rain falls in the street, I smile
watching my dog run

“Sad and heavy” is the sort of abstraction that is the opposite of haiku
Rain falls in the street
My dog runs:
I smile.

Would be closer to the spirit, though it too is horrible

thanks for reading. If I write more of these I will not share them here, probably. all the feedback has just been pedantry about what haiku traditionally do.

It’s not pedantry at all
Haiku exists to exploit brevity and condensation as devices
Merely writing 3 lines doesn’t  do anything unless you’re able to pack a punch
So no, your attempts at haiku have so far been terrible. Nothing to do with dogma