Haiku (when I'm sad and heavy)

[RiverNotch]

I mean, this is like complaining about getting dogpiled over your sonnets just because every one of them is twelve lines long, complaining about getting dogpiled over your sestinas because you don't repeat your six words at all, complaining about getting dogpiled over your villanelles....

Only, of course, the previous forms are all traditionally Western. Westerners of course find that they can be more flexible with haiku because it comes from a completely different, completely alien, perhaps even inhuman tradition, so of course you can treat it with less respect :eyeroll:

You could always just post your tercets and say they're not haiku, they're tercets. But your insistence in imitating a Japanese form without actually paying your duties to the Japanese conception of it is just....yikes. Like Vanilla Ice.

Haiku

When I'm sad and heavy
rain falls in the street, I smile
watching my dog run

“Sad and heavy” is the sort of abstraction that is the opposite of haiku
Rain falls in the street
My dog runs:
I smile.

Would be closer to the spirit, though it too is horrible

thanks for reading. If I write more of these I will not share them here, probably. all the feedback has just been pedantry about what haiku traditionally do.