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"THE HOUSE THAT DRIPS BLOOD"

What an interesting thought,
I think.

How could a house
drip blood?

Maybe there was a
serial killer...

Maybe it wasn't
actually blood;

but then, what would
it be?

These questions all circle through my
mind, and

the $6.99 answers
call me.

Then I
remember that:

people lie,

and continue walking but now my eyes
look down.

"THE HOUSE THAT DRIPS BLOOD"

What an interesting thought,
I think.

How could a house
drip blood?

Maybe it was a
serial killer...

Maybe it wasn't
actually blood;

but then, what would
it be?

These questions all circle through my
mind, and

the $6.99 answers that the loud
yellow font

promises seem
so attractive.

Then I
remember that:

people lie,

and continue walking but now my eyes
look down.

it's a grower not a shower
liking it more with each read
halloweeny!
will comment after work
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The occasion is clear exposition is handled without melodrama. I appreciate the speaker's conversational but conspiratorial tone.
The haunted house grift or whatever becomes an opportunity to reflect on a kind of looming interpersonal anxiety.

Note: should the could/wasn't bits be in present tense?

The ending feels a bit deflatory. People lie.. ok? Now my eyes look down... It feels a bit like it's trying to be deep but it just feels a bit fluffy to me. I'm sympathetic to the speaker's ethos, want a sharper tip to drive the spear.

Thank you for the feedback! I've been thinking actually, maybe I should just replace the whole "then I remember...look down" bit with just a simple "is it worth it?" or something similar, what do you think?