Anxious Poem

[dukealien]

I often end poems with a sort of dramatic line  "sort of" is unnecessary but does help portray lack of confidence
I’d like to think it’s a bad habit  the narrator's self-centeredness comes through well here

everything has to be:  could this make it clearer that, not "everything," but only the last line is being characterized?
life changing
inspiring
ugly
beautiful
black
off-white  better than "gray" - indeed, only these last two show (metaphorically) instead of tell

see
just there
I could have ended with
“i should stop and smell the roses”  structurally, the narrator is referring to a missing poem imagined in the white space above

In basic critique, this is sort of (g) an "inside baseball" discussion by the narrator... who may  not be (probably is not?) the actual poet.  He's showing off his second thoughts but not cringing about possible criticism, more like anticipating it and showing that he does anticipate it.  He knows his weaknesses, and parades them.

Is he asking for help?  No... not advertising, either, exactly.  On the other hand, anxiety (per the title) doesn't quite come through for me; I'd suggest either changing the title to reflect more hope for affection, or including lines expressing actual fear of rejection.

Frankly, that's a little convoluted for Basic, but there could be quite a bit going on there.