Today, 03:10 AM
Sorry, I found this all very boring and forgettable. Haiku about frogs. Never got off the ground for me. Conceit did not convince me it needed to exist in the world.
Why the poemy word "plashing"
I don't think the project makes sense. The way haiku generate sensibility and heat isn't working with this serialised form. They want to be individually pregnant with meaning but also cohere into some kind of meta narrative? It feels like a big puzzle I don't much care to solve. And the register seems undecided about whether it wants to be cheeky and whimsical or Important and Deep
Ok speaker has some interesting thoughts about frogs, maybe just ditch the tiresome and overbearing haiku crown conceit
I think this dude would be a lot more interesting if allowed to speak in fuller sentences
Why the poemy word "plashing"
I don't think the project makes sense. The way haiku generate sensibility and heat isn't working with this serialised form. They want to be individually pregnant with meaning but also cohere into some kind of meta narrative? It feels like a big puzzle I don't much care to solve. And the register seems undecided about whether it wants to be cheeky and whimsical or Important and Deep
Ok speaker has some interesting thoughts about frogs, maybe just ditch the tiresome and overbearing haiku crown conceit
I think this dude would be a lot more interesting if allowed to speak in fuller sentences