Figuring it out (v2)
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Hi,
(Today, 04:45 AM)matsunosuperfan Wrote:  Figuring it out 
>I like the title, it what kids spend their childhood doing

I was a lonely child, my dreams were wild    
>nice internal rhyme with child and wild

and dangerous: I’d read a Ranger Rick
about Brazil, and wake up wrestling
a hungry anaconda for my life.
>This example leans on wild and dangerous nicely

When other children found me odd, I took it
as a compliment—“Hello,” they’d say,
and I’d recite a fact about the moon
or list the pros and cons of having toes.
>I particularly like the line about the toes. I go back to the fight with the anaconda which has no toes

Adults, when I told them the truth, would stare
at me, then laugh—later, I would learn
to call this rush of joy a joke.
>Children make adults laugh with their truthfulness. That the boy is joking at the end feels resolved.
Thanks for the read, Rob
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Figuring it out (v2) - by matsunosuperfan - Today, 04:45 AM
RE: Figuring it out - by busker - Today, 06:31 AM
RE: Figuring it out - by robdaley - Today, 07:20 AM
RE: Figuring it out (v2) - by hylas - 30 minutes ago



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