07-09-2010, 10:09 AM
Wow, I really like this one of yours, LB. 
(07-08-2010, 12:59 PM)Loveblind Wrote: music doesn't satisfy my ears anymore Like this opening line
laughter feels forced
anger is hidden from a crowd don't think "is" is needed?
but, reappears when alone
your touch disappoints me I found this line poignant in its directness
stones are in my throat
for, I am mute
something's missing
dreams are shattered into the broken glass
where I see my face and future
I am not myself
I am hidden behind your controls
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?