07-15-2010, 04:28 PM
(for me) the man in the poem doesn't come across as
someone who'd be doing a long time Bianca.
the story feels to nice if you know what i mean.
maybe it should be heavier or darker. jmo
though the last stanza is perfect.
thanks for
someone who'd be doing a long time Bianca.
the story feels to nice if you know what i mean.
maybe it should be heavier or darker. jmo
though the last stanza is perfect.

thanks for
