08-11-2010, 02:09 PM
This really struck a nerve with me. It's great how you get your readers to see the story from that different angle.
It might sound a bit too crass for you, but I think you can safely use the word "shit" around the end to really drive that point home... after all the allusions to blood and death, I think it could be rather fitting and make it sound a lot angrier.
Liked this one
It might sound a bit too crass for you, but I think you can safely use the word "shit" around the end to really drive that point home... after all the allusions to blood and death, I think it could be rather fitting and make it sound a lot angrier.
Liked this one
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?