10-26-2010, 05:03 PM
(10-26-2010, 04:49 PM)addy Wrote: Interesting piece, with a great mood in it. I think it's about a funeral/graveyard? Though I could be mistaken.
I noticed several words were capitalized (Sun, Witnesses, Air, Mound, etc). Was this a stylistic choice? Also, I'd be careful of some of the word choices (in the first verse third line, I don't think "clatter" is the word you want). But overall, there's a fascinating air to the scenario that I enjoyed.
Thanks very much for posting this
Close what I wanted was what at first seems like a walk through a park, n=but after you notice he is dead, he if going into enternal rest withour acomplishing his dreams.He has many regrets.
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Sun: the sun represents life in most stories, the sun gives warmth and life to all living creatures on earth, but with the quote “The Sun shines on all but him” it means he is lifeless
Stone Crowd: gravestones and the dead people in the graveyard: cold= dead, no pace or sound= not living
Trees: Mourners and other living beings or earth when put into context of leaves (lives) falling off of it.
Leaves: other life’s (DEAD leaves) which are falling or the tears of the trees
Path: the journey of life: (worn, messy)
Guide: death/ angel: (bitter, hymn= holy)
Air: the realisation of life
Mound: weight of burdens