is it okay if we call you mb?
first off we normally don't give an in depth crit to poems posted in the mild critique section. you can always repost it in the serious critique forum if you wish
clutter not clatter in L3
reiteration; the use of the same word or phrase more than once within the poem. when it works it works, when it doesn't it doesn't.
leaves, worn, trees, cold, break (breaks), calm (calms), time.
where ever possible use a different word unless you're trying to echo or trying to emphasise.
halfway through the poem we switch from being the 2nd person to the first. the crossover does jar a little.
from the poem itself i get a feeling of druid come merlin-esque type of poem. some good lines but for me it needs a good pruning.
i'm not sure what you mean by symbols mb?
thanks for the read.