10-26-2010, 08:50 PM
(10-26-2010, 08:40 PM)meanbubbles Wrote: Thank you, both of you. I needed to read the types of short poetry thread. I never knew about senryu, i though that The water was the main character but i see i was wrong by introducing person first and basing it on people.some say you can use people but i think if you do, it has to be in a straight forward way.
in this one it's not too bad. what makes it more a senyru is "the blessing of spring" make blessing something definite.
the melt of spring or something else.