12-16-2009, 11:28 AM
it's sweet. is that what you intended?
a lot of the poem is a bit redundant
because it gives the same image.
i think love poetry is great but i think it should have some images and lack
the well worn cliches. use it as the basis and edit edit edit. if you want to do the best poem you can do you must edit, a poem under these circumstances is never finished. if it's just for a loved one it's fine. the intent of writing it makes it special in it's own right.
a lot of the poem is a bit redundant
because it gives the same image.
i think love poetry is great but i think it should have some images and lack
the well worn cliches. use it as the basis and edit edit edit. if you want to do the best poem you can do you must edit, a poem under these circumstances is never finished. if it's just for a loved one it's fine. the intent of writing it makes it special in it's own right.