The Dark Rode (1st revision)

[billy]

for me the way you tightened it up works really well
the rut thing does add something so unless you come up with something else i'd leave it, perhaps one of the others may have a suggestion to help.

i did not that in the first verse you go from plural (wheels) to singular (its) would it works better as (their wake) it's also worth going over any missed grammar.

thanks for the read.