The Dark Rode (1st revision)

[abu nuwas]

(Revised)



Emboldened knight My latest version Abu Nuwas
emblazoned blood
axles creak
in ruts he rides

Bespoken wheels
turn and churn
ground in his wake

Down day sinks
in growing dim
cost of eternity
chasing the moon.

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(original)

A wheel bespoke
to turn and churn
ground in its wake

The knight emboldened
emblazoned with blood
over the axles creak
in the rut he rode

The day sank
into a growing dim
the cost of eternity..
for chasing the moon.

I have amended the new, improved version (i.e. the top bit-- I hope this does not give the impression of being the writer's changes. If so, I shall delete. Mine is, I confess, more like a simple narrative.