Unspoken Words

[Aish]

I think it's lovely, except for that final line.

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Unspoken Words 1st revision.

Mere words cannot convey a pea
or pod of what it is we share,
although I try, with verbal charm.
My speech is eloquent and yet;
the showing of this soul whose search
has found a place to rest in love
is more-- A thorn of sharpness borne shouldn't 'A' be lowercase?
by stem enhancing bud and bloom.
with boulders in my mouth i try, 'with' should be capitalized.
but can't express a verbal ounce
of ink, I'm not a poet fair.
To capture feelings with a fire!
A task I fear beyond my means.
I beg of you, cast eye to eye
and in the depth of our delight
see words not scribed or spoken-- I keep reading this as 'see not words scribed or spoken'
In their absence may thoughts be shown I am not fond of this line. Perhaps something along the lines of 'in their absence whisper gentle actions?

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Unspoken Words.

Words--
mere words cannot, I plainly see
explain to me what we both share
though I try, with verbal charm
my words to you, would not permit
the showing, of a soul whose search
has found a place to rest in love
a thorn of sharpness here to stay
sharpness that enhances life
how do I mention all the things
written by poets through the age
and capture feelings with a fire?
a task I fear beyond my means
I beg of you, cast eye to eye
and in the depth of soul’s delight
see words not scribed or spoken
just know their silent meaning

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this is another early poem and a personal one but don't worry. just treat it as any other poem.