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The imagery is indeed pretty sumptuous ( I loved "hiding itself, within itself"). Nicely done. If I had to make a suggestion, you can choose to cut down on some of the adjectives. For instance in your first lines "When the clouds are great, gray pillows ---and the sky is deep and ominous---" you've got quite a few adjectives going on; but really great, gray clouds express nearly the same thing as deep, ominous skies so over-elaboration is not necessary, and this can be tightened. Same thing with "refracted light", which though lovely is a near repetition of the already beautiful "iridescent specter". This is just food for thought though, and purely an opinion. Thank you for sharing this piece